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Perfect Love

If I should say that perfect love exists
Then I’d be lying to you and to me
‘tis lust disguised, not easy to resist
And bound in chains while thinking he was free.
The quest for perfect love is hard, unfair,
It is more than just proclaiming “I care”
'tis not elusive, tis' not even there
'tis just a beautiful dream we all share.
There’s no such thing as sweet perfect love
‘tis all lies, an impossibility
‘tis the wise who realize that from above
Amid the heavens, in all God’s glory;
Perfect love is divine, as the dawn breaks;
Human love is filled with flaws and mistakes.
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A cynical view of the passion we call "love" and the futile search for this "perfect" emotion in the form of a sonnet, inspired ironically by Shakespeare's "Romeo and Juliet".
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:icondanielmellor:
Here we have the definition of irony: a perfect poem describing an imperfect love. I am truly amazed by this piece; not only does it boast excellent technique, but everything that has been mentioned is ever so true. This poem has no false emotion: a problem with some others that I have read.

Well done.
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~axis- Nov 20, 2002   Writer
im in accordence with your contention. heh i firmly concur..... and i wish i could write anything close to that, AND I HAVE TO, i have a sonnet due in 16 hours. and i have to sleep for a majority of those hours leaving me screwed...lol gimmie your tallent! for a couple hours
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:iconnetguru:
I like it, yet I will still continue to search for perfect love....If I never find it my lust never take it's place. :fav:

I would like permission to add this to my favorites devpack please.
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:iconjsenn:
I wonder...

if we should memorize this and say it over and over until we believed it

perhaps we should write it in our palm so we see it when we reach to touch another

it's ancient, decided, unclear to the innocent and yet...painfully true.

your poem is perceptive and well done
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:iconitsprobablyme:
lust... i sure do agree with u!

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who?? me??? huh?? me??? D:o (Eek)
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:iconbasilius:
why do all of you have to express their feelings in senseless blind words, full of real world´s obstacles, deaf by shoutings of one dirty mouth against another?


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:iconvm:
wow, give DP to this right away please : )

That's a great poem wooz..wich I can relate to so much, because i've been hurt so much by that mysterious "Quest for the perfect Love" before..and I realise now that the words you speak here are true, in some way..

The eternal romantic in me says there is such a thing, but the "Real world" is telling me a different story..

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:iconliquify:
as a poet, it's hard for me to be pleased with other people's writing, not that i'm conceited in the least bit, it's just that i feel that their influence on my writing makes it not my own, i would, however, like to say that i am simply blown away by one line in this poem, it's something that i could not have come up with on my own, and that you have earned my respect by writing.

"Human love is filled with flaws and mistakes."

not only is that one of the truest lines i have ever read but it fits so wonderfully at the end of this piece, it's so matter of fact, perfect.

when confronted with hate and ignorance, one must liquify.
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~savis Apr 17, 2001  Hobbyist General Artist
so true, so true, and yet utterly depressing. Nice piece of poem though, I like it
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:iconarleetec:
You got that right wooz, right on. This poem is very unique. Good use of words.
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