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The Perfect Love by ~woozster:iconwoozster:

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Perfect Love

If I should say that perfect love exists
Then I’d be lying to you and to me
‘tis lust disguised, not easy to resist
And bound in chains while thinking he was free.
The quest for perfect love is hard, unfair,
It is more than just proclaiming “I care”
'tis not elusive, tis' not even there
'tis just a beautiful dream we all share.
There’s no such thing as sweet perfect love
‘tis all lies, an impossibility
‘tis the wise who realize that from above
Amid the heavens, in all God’s glory;
Perfect love is divine, as the dawn breaks;
Human love is filled with flaws and mistakes.
©2001-2010 ~woozster
:iconwoozster:

Author's Comments

A cynical view of the passion we call "love" and the futile search for this "perfect" emotion in the form of a sonnet, inspired ironically by Shakespeare's "Romeo and Juliet".

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`switched Apr 16, 2001, 7:46:20 PM
nice peice, i never read much poetry on this site. Should you use 'its' and 'tis' like that or keep it consistant, just seemed strange to me. i know nothing of poetry, i like it though.

:iconwoozster:
~woozster Apr 16, 2001, 8:20:24 PM
I fixed it on the d/loadable file; thanks for pointing it out to me--I didn't even realize the error :) (Smile)

~wooziefied~
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`cooper Apr 16, 2001, 10:46:03 PM
I do see no errors.... it looks great; AMAZING.... just a beautiful poem. Keep up the amazing work.

dEaTh SmIlEs At Us AlL...
AlL i CaN dO iS sMiLe BaCk...

@coop@
:iconseblon:
~seblon Apr 16, 2001, 10:58:06 PM
very, very nice. and unfortunatly i have to agree that it's true.


-seb
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~arleetec Apr 16, 2001, 11:49:36 PM
You got that right wooz, right on. This poem is very unique. Good use of words.
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~savis Apr 17, 2001, 1:03:06 AM
so true, so true, and yet utterly depressing. Nice piece of poem though, I like it
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`liquify May 2, 2001, 1:26:55 AM
as a poet, it's hard for me to be pleased with other people's writing, not that i'm conceited in the least bit, it's just that i feel that their influence on my writing makes it not my own, i would, however, like to say that i am simply blown away by one line in this poem, it's something that i could not have come up with on my own, and that you have earned my respect by writing.

"Human love is filled with flaws and mistakes."

not only is that one of the truest lines i have ever read but it fits so wonderfully at the end of this piece, it's so matter of fact, perfect.

when confronted with hate and ignorance, one must liquify.
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`vm May 17, 2001, 12:47:46 AM
wow, give DP to this right away please : )

That's a great poem wooz..wich I can relate to so much, because i've been hurt so much by that mysterious "Quest for the perfect Love" before..and I realise now that the words you speak here are true, in some way..

The eternal romantic in me says there is such a thing, but the "Real world" is telling me a different story..

virtual mirage : v2
http://www.vmirage.net
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~basilius Jun 20, 2001, 12:06:50 PM
why do all of you have to express their feelings in senseless blind words, full of real world´s obstacles, deaf by shoutings of one dirty mouth against another?


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